(Peers name), your essay was very good, and was easy to understand and follow. It was interesting and wasn’t boring to read. I like how you added your own opinion was evident in the essay. I would just add more to some paragraphs like examples of personal narratives, more quotes, just to show the reader a more in depth paragraph. More quotes never hurt, and adding them the reader has more evidence. I thought your opening paragraph was very good and I could understand what the essay was gonna be about. You stayed true throughout the whole essay and didn’t stray off on topics that didn’t relate. You could also add more of a conversation between Strawson and Beck and elaborate on how they disagree with each other. Overall I really liked your essay, and I agree with the points you are making. You did a really good job laying out the whole essay.
Sophie Horton
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